Matt Bellamy

Hi! I like the imagery you used in this poem. I suppose the colour of your eys thing is a little cliche but it was such a sweet way to ...

This is a really nice poem. I like how you picked a theme and stuck with that format all the way through. I think in places the rhyming sounds a ...

This is an interesting poem. I quite like it, though it does seem a little creepy. You have capitalised some words unnecessarily, so you need to go through and check ...

Hello! I think using a rollercoaster metaphor could have been a little cliche but you made it work because of the description you added to it, so I quite liked ...

You have the beginnings of an interesting poem here, but there isn't much joining the three stanzas together. What you do have is good, there just needs to be more ...

Hey Mr. Knightley! not sure how much help I can be where punctuation is concerned - it's always tricky in poetry. People have their own styles, some people think it ...

This is great. Your imagery is vivid and interesting; I felt a bit like I was there. What also makes this poem interesting is how you've indented the lines. I ...

Hey! I really like this. I think your imagery and description is very good and vivid. I think you mean "continue" though, because "iron boots" is plural. I don't really ...

This is quite a cute poem, and it did make me smile. However, it also made me wonder what its point was. If you could incorporate a clear, strong message ...

I really like this poem - it's interesting and original. I think it would be even better if you could make all the lines relatively the same length, just so ...

Hi! This poem has a very strong message, which is good. You did lose the rhyming at the end, though, and your meter is a little off - try counting ...

Hi! I think this poem flows really nicely, and you put your ideas across well in a small space. The rhyming is good, and I only noticed on a second ...

Hi there! I think the main problem with this poem is where your line-breaks are. It makes it a little difficult to read, but while in some places it does ...

This is a very interesting poem. I don't often find poems in such a story form on YWS, so it makes a nice change. When I first read it, I ...

I really like this poem. It's well written and emotional. I just have a few small nit-picks. In the second stanza, I think you should replace the full stop after ...